Sonichu Australatina Defence Force: The Comic - ghostyTrickster tries to be _Blank_ and fails miserably

[ghostyTrickster]

Hello everyone! As you can tell by the title of the thread, I am starting a comic. The primary focus being around fictional countries and cities and the autists that made them. I'm planning on putting in a diverse range of Lolcows as the comic progresses, some will be background jokes and others will be characters later on in the story.

...That's about all I really have to say about it I guess.

Spoiler: Big Pages

Obviously my art style needs a little work, it's almost hard to believe that this took two months to do

Hopefully for what I lack in art I can make up in writing, haha.

(Just now realized I left the pallet in on the panel with Phil. Oops)

(Also the 2XXX thing wasn't meant to be a sex/porno joke, I just wanted to be really ambiguous on when this takes place)

Obviously criticism is much appreciated, I look forward to writing for you guys God Bless

 

[José Mourinho]

Looks not bad. Keep it up!

 

[Crisseh]

Good job!

 

[ToroidalBoat]

Obviously criticism is much appreciated

It's a good start! But it needs more cheese, volcanoes, and street signs.

 

[ghostyTrickster]

It's a good start! But it needs more cheese, volcanoes, and street signs.

Noted!

 

[Witlich]

I sincerely can't wait to see this develop!

 

[NeverHappened]

I wish Aspergia had proper world building. Needs actual aspergers and not just autism.

Societies are ran by external tugboats. I could see economic activity going on in CWCville, but I worry about how militaristic cows will be distributed.

 

[ghostyTrickster]

I wish Aspergia had proper world building. Needs actual aspergers and not just autism.

Societies are ran by external tugboats. I could see economic activity going on in CWCville, but I worry about how militaristic cows will be distributed.

I have some plans that will go further into how cows are spread throughout the land, it's kind of a fun concept to think about how certain cows would group up with others.

 

[Mr. 0]

Is Nick Bate and his prison going to feature in any way?

 

[ChameleonBody]

Is Phil going to be "Phil classic" as you've portrayed him or the obese freakshow he's morphed into? It might be hard to keep him up to date as the latter because every one of his new pictures makes him look like a new, somehow even more retarded person.

 

[ActualKiwi]

Good luck trying to get all phil's tattoos in there.

 

[Witlich]

For the poll ... it depends on how much Sonichu and Chris-chan Sonichu will be featured. If they aren't as present in the comic, then there's no need for it to be in the Sonichu subforum.

 

[ghostyTrickster]

Is Phil going to be "Phil classic" as you've portrayed him or the obese freakshow he's morphed into? It might be hard to keep him up to date as the latter because every one of his new pictures makes him look like a new, somehow even more retarded person.

That's part of the reason why I ended up putting him in as Phil classic, originally I was going to put him as modern Phil and just change the design as Phil changes for a running joke, but Classic Phil suited my needs more of a communist dictator. Plus classic Phil is just more fun to draw in general

 

[ghostyTrickster]

Is Nick Bate and his prison going to feature in any way?

(Apologies for Double Posting, but I tried to edit these quotes in and it wouldn't let me) Nick Bate is a tricky one, eventually I will start taking requests for group shots of cows, so I'm sure his nasty face will show up eventually.

Good luck trying to get all phil's tattoos in there.

As I stated before, I will be going off of Classic Phil, but worry not, I will be sneaking in references to his tats later on.

For the poll ... it depends on how much Sonichu and Chris-chan Sonichu will be featured. If they aren't as present in the comic, then there's no need for it to be in the Sonichu subforum.

It appears the mods have found the answer to this one, thanks mods!!:

Spoiler: Image

 

[Firesharpie]

I love me a good webcomic. Can't wait to see how this develops!

 

[SP 199]

GG

 

[DykesDykesChina]

Idea: Add a third power block, a run-down rural medieval-like shithole run by a fat, choleric king known as Drachenlord and his right hand man, a perverse anorexic Golden Knight whose special ability is killing bugs.

 

[ghostyTrickster]

New page y'all,

Spoiler: Large Image

Oh golly the formatting is a mess and our special guests anatomy is way off... don't worry guys the next page should be a lot better than this. I promise?

EDIT:

Spoiler: ART SPERGING

As you can tell, I am new to comic writing, and I still have a lot to learn. Lately I've been studying @_blank_ 's and @Trickie 's works and seeing how they(The much more experienced artists) format their comics. (Of course, me being the dunce I am, I did this study after I had already done the layout of two pages, this one and the next one)

After my study I ended up putting these observations to the test by writing a little test page for something that has nothing to do with ADF:The Comic, here's a unedited scan of it:
I Honestly really like the way I did this.
Basically I just put this here to show that I do have better pages on the way, now that I have taken the time to really observe what real comics do.

As usual Criticism as well as writing and art tips are greatly appreciated.

 

[Firesharpie]

At least Jace knocked before coming in. How polite.