ITT I review Anesthesia's unsolicited torture porn roleplay - A lot of room for improvement

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So, a lot to unpack here. It starts off nice and strong, with some all-caps rage and gets right into some meaty details. That's a nice touch, we all appreciate a torture-daddy with confidence. But then it starts going downhill fast when @Anesthesia feels the need to reiterate just how edgy and cruel he is. If somebody's "unleashed the terror", as a general rule you want to show, don't tell. The historical references are clunky at best, inaccurate at worst. Does uncontrollable lust and anger really make you feel like lingering environmental pollution from a chlorine gas attack? Is that really the kind of allegory you want to make? You want something primal and fierce, not something that just looks like an excuse for you to show off some obscure fact you learned because Battlefield 1 added a Passchendaele map. It's just poorly thought out. And while we're on the topic of historical inaccuracy, I feel I really should point out that iron can't reach melting temperature without a modern blast or arc furnace, and whoever told him that the mongols poured hot iron onto their enemies certainly did him a disservice there. I'd like to tell him he's confusing it with the end of Marcus Licinius Crassus' illegal campaign in Parthia, but the sad truth that I think we all know is that he's really confusing it with that one episode of Game of Thrones.

Moving past this, details are glossed over and sparse when we actually need them. You can't just say you're going to "do scaphism" to somebody. Are we talking milk & honey overfeeding method, or are we talking open bowl perforation method? Very shoddy work, with far too much emphasis paid to writing out an overarching list of things that sound edgy, and very little care given to the actual grit and grime of how these tortures will feel. Especially when he's describing things that quite simply wouldn't work out well ; a medieval warhammer is faced with jagged grip to bite into the target and properly transfer force, it's not something you can just club somebody over the head with and stun them. It will simply punch a hole through the skull the size of a quarter and instantly kill them. And while we're on that topic, why does he have a medieval warhammer, a sawed-off shotgun, and a flamethrower? This is unnecessary and quite simply, immersion breaking.

All in all this is some pedestrian torture porn with many glaring issues, and does not rise to the standards required to harass a Kiwi Farms member with.

2/10 not impressed.
 

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i'd give it an extra point just for not keeping the same approach the who le way through. the historical references are weak, sure, but they're quickly abandoned for just a few, (though admittedly minor) details about what the process entails, before then tying it up with a neat literary bow reference to vlad the impaler.
 
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Truly one would wonder the relevancy of the Mongol Empire in all of this. In any case, the legacy of the Mongol empire would clearly not be respected as the Mongol empire would punish these criminals by pouring molten silver in their eyes, and not all over their face like our author here is suggesting. Truly a bad display of historical accuracy and extremely rude cultural appropriation on top of that.
 

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Truly one would wonder the relevancy of the Mongol Empire in all of this. In any case, the legacy of the Mongol empire would clearly not be respected as the Mongol empire would punish these criminals by pouring molten silver in their eyes, and not all over their face like our author here is suggesting. Truly a bad display of historical accuracy and extremely rude cultural appropriation on top of that.
Not the mention the importance of bloodless deaths for members of the nobility, which equated to breaking their spine or in the case of the Russian nobles they captured they would fashion large wooden platforms and hold feasts on. These platforms would be placed upon the captured nobles, crushing them to death as the mongols feasted.
 
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