Growing Around Opposite Day -

Jumpin Jenkins

Needs About Tree Fiddy
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Or the Education system
that didn't taught him how to write(or maybe that's because Enter didn't pay any attention to the class, but that would be silly)
Of course, how could Enter do anything wrong?
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anephric

PBBBBBBBBBBBTTTTHHH
True & Honest Fan
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The opening bracketed description is terrible for a series of reasons. It doesn't establish anything. INT or EXT for interior / exterior scene, doesn't frame that with a locale. It's also generic in its description - there is nothing here to grab you because not only is the scene generic but the description is unenthusiastic.

It's obvious Enter is so enamored with his own self-worth and supposed talent, he couldn't event *copy* a professional screenplay format.

I've seen more arrogant first year film students do better than this.
 

Johnny Bravo

Bravokin
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Everything wrong with this script in a list:

1. The world Enter creates is a strawman; because the world is run by adults everything is grey and monotone. This premise could have been funny if we could relate to "strange" world Linda and Robert find themselves in, but we can't because of Enter's unfounded soap boxing about how adults ruin everything.

2. The implication that Timmy and Sally - biological siblings - sleep together in a king sized bed. (EDIT: A previous episode shows Timmy and Sally sleep in a bunk bet, but in this episode Robert and Linda act as if they've awoken in their children's bed. Which is it?)

3. The implication that married adults are forced to sleep in separate rooms and separate beds. Once you have kids in this world does your sex life just end?

4. Linda and Robert have no idea what an alarm clock is despite the fact they must have used one when they were kids and had to wake up for their jobs. Even here in the real world I was using an alarm clock to wake up for school by the time I was ten. FFS. (EDIT: This is in contradiction to previous episodes where the adults do have alarm clocks.)

5. We never got to see Linda make her wish and don't know what led up to it.

6. All the dialogue, but especially the principal's conversation with Timmy.

7. The principal worries about being sued because Sally is on the basketball hoop but jamming bars of soap into a kid's mouth against their will is totally fine.

8. Sally worries about the bus driver's reaction time on the road in spite of his fully developed adult brain. (EDIT: Previous episodes establish Sally is an extremely reckless driver, making her concern out of character.)

9. This entire plot happens because "a wizard did it."

10. Enter establishes that this is the kind of world Linda wants to live in, yet she gives it up without experiencing a single second of temptation to stay.

11. The implication that there are no traffic laws in GA. (EDIT: An implication which also contradicts previous episodes.)

12. Robert and Linda struggle more with the core concept of driving a car than the fact that their new vehicle is of a completely different design to the car they drove as children (pictured on the show's poster). It should be more like trying to drive a real car after you've only driven go-carts.

13. GUMDROPS DIES WHAT THE FUCK.

14. All my edits explaining why this episode sucks even within the context of the series.
 
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Johnny Bravo

Bravokin
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You act like that's a bad thing.

Imagine this from the perspective of a child. If you grew up with a pet odds are you also experienced the death of said pet. This is a huge deal for kids, as it is often their first experience with death.

Here's what happens in this episode: The family wakes up in the morning and can't find their beloved pet. Since both the kids and parents have to be at school/work they must go about their day and hope their pet will turn up later. When the family returns home they find their pet's corpse, stone cold dead in the garage.

I cannot figure out what Enter was going for with this plot thread. Is this supposed to be a joke? Are we supposed to be sad and, if so, why is Gumdrop's death brushed off so callously? The scene where the family finds Gumdrop is presented like a death scene except that it's brushed aside too quickly without any consequence. Why didn't he just do what anyone with an ounce of understanding would do and turn Gumdrop from a pony into a dog or cat? Or even a goldfish? Anything would have been better than killing her.

I know the answer to all these questions is autism, but god damn.

I thought Gumdrops was a motorcycle or something.

She changed from a pony into a motorcycle, which is basically the same as killing her, especially with how the scene is written.
 

Someone

Stop gendering genitals!
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In the "normal" world the family owns a motorcycle named Gumdrops. The discovery was accompanied with a melodramatic scene.
For the love of god
Enter doing melodramatic scenes is really pathetic
and what sissy would name a motorcycle Gumdrops?
 

Headbanger General

I think I've got brain damage...
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Imagine this from the perspective of a child. If you grew up with a pet odds are you also experienced the death of said pet. This is a huge deal for kids, as it is often their first experience with death.

Here's what happens in this episode: The family wakes up in the morning and can't find their beloved pet. Since both the kids and parents have to be at school/work they must go about their day and hope their pet will turn up later. When the family returns home they find their pet's corpse, stone cold dead in the garage.

I cannot figure out what Enter was going for with this plot thread. Is this supposed to be a joke? Are we supposed to be sad and, if so, why is Gumdrop's death brushed off so callously? The scene where the family finds Gumdrop is presented like a death scene except that it's brushed aside too quickly without any consequence. Why didn't he just do what anyone with an ounce of understanding would do and turn Gumdrop from a pony into a dog or cat? Or even a goldfish? Anything would have been better than killing her.

I know the answer to all these questions is autism, but god damn.



She changed from a pony into a motorcycle, which is basically the same as killing her, especially with how the scene is written.

Well, see, I just figured that there was no place in the "normal" world for a magic pony, so the elder gods replaced it with a motorcycle. I mean, grown men will often treat cars and such with the same type of affection as a pet, so it fits, IMHO.
 

Johnny Bravo

Bravokin
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Well, see, I just figured that there was no place in the "normal" world for a magic pony, so the elder gods replaced it with a motorcycle. I mean, grown men will often treat cars and such with the same type of affection as a pet, so it fits, IMHO.

It might have worked if Enter hadn't written the scene the way he did. I still think it would have been funnier if he turned her into a normal kind of pet. You could get some decent physical comedy out of an animal as big as a horse learning to be a gerbil or something.
 
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