Snowflake StraySheep / Kayla Marie Waller / morinokunikara / blankshadesgame - Thread #2 The Return of the Transtrender Sperglord Who Tried To Delete Her Thread

[cluelessly]

I genuinely really hate the way she starts off that excerpt.

"This whole thing...it was just like..."

What the fuck is that, Kayla? I can't think of a more unappealing way to invite someone into a piece of writing. It reads like a text message.

Sorry for the double-post but here you go, Kayla, I tried to fix your fucking prose. Please read a book. If you were a regular reader, the corrections I've injected would have been second nature. Also flames don't "bellow", pretty sure you meant "billow".


This scenario was painfully familiar.

“Mom! Dad!” Galo's own voice howled within himself, recalling desperation as flames consumed his home. Noxious blue and purple billowed through narrow streets, sparking memories from that day, years ago.

“Calm down, I've got you.” The voice had sounded indignant more than anything- as if Galo needed evidence his hero was full of shit!

Then he was alone, an unlucky survivor. Would this child endure a similar fate? Did they have anywhere to turn, after losing so much?

I have to do something. Anything.

 

[Agent Nahman Jayden]

Oooo this cow's doin' me a tilt.

She's wasting zero fucking time going back to crying about her writing. It's almost like she never wanted to keep the job.

Sometimes I wonder what it's like to be so stupid that you just parrot the same things you've been saying even though the shit you ask for has been given to you SO MANY FUCKING TIMES.

 

[Unhindered Clown]

The fundamental problem that hurts her writing is that kayla writes the exact same way she talks. Her style of writing is therefore insufferable to read, and this is generally a habit that is either naturally or forcibly ditched around college.

 

[Xerxes IX]

I genuinely really hate the way she starts off that excerpt.

"This whole thing...it was just like..."

What the fuck is that, Kayla? I can't think of a more unappealing way to invite someone into a piece of writing. It reads like a text message.

I know the passage is supposed to be from Galo's perspective and the fandom loves to call him a himbo but that doesn't mean you have to narrate it like a Valley Girl, Kayla.

 

[retard strength]

Anytime someone gives feedback about her writing expectations or goals, she replies with a "Yeah but...", "OK but..." "I just want..." "Yet other people..."

She cannot simply thank them and sit with the valuable advice and feedback people spend time composing for her. Just completely dismisses it all to repeat and continue on with whatever her original complaint was. She clearly has friendly mutuals making suggestions anonymously, but they will give up on her eventually and she will not understand why but blame them for everything.

 

[patchwork]

Alongside the "writes how she speaks," a lot of the media she consumes is highly visual/dialogue heavy - anime and idol mobile games tend to let all the art assets do the description for them because well why wouldn't it? However, she carries this over into writing, so she ends up with shit like this where she's writing what reads more like an inner monologue rather than interesting description. So for the nth time, her problem is that she won't read an actual fucking book and learn what compelling writing looks like.

She's outright better off writing script-style, because at least then readers are coming in with the foreknowledge that they aren't going to get a lot of description, they just need to take the bare minimum setting and action descriptions, and tone cues given to them, and let their mind do the heavy lifting.

Script isn't all that popular on Ao3 either as far as I can tell (then again, I avoid it because I actually enjoy halfway decent prose), but anything's better than Kayla trying to hold your hand and walking you through the emotions she's trying super, super hard to get across in her writing.

 

[Pull me from the void]

Of course she does, if someone gets really lucky and their fics are successful, you're going to hear about them. It is not the case for most writers, the world is full of fics that are better written than Kayla's and have gotten less attention. She's just so jealous of anyone more successful than her.

Anytime someone gives feedback about her writing expectations or goals, she replies with a "Yeah but...", "OK but..." "I just want..." "Yet other people..."

She cannot simply thank them and sit with the valuable advice and feedback people spend time composing for her. Just completely dismisses it all to repeat and continue on with whatever her original complaint was. She clearly has friendly mutuals making suggestions anonymously, but they will give up on her eventually and she will not understand why but blame them for everything.

That's because she doesn't really want advice. She just wants popularity to fall magically from the sky into her hands. She only says she's open to criticism to make herself look more humble.

 

[Neurotypical Mantis]

are we absolutely fucking sure kayla is afab because holy shit that facial structure is peak troonmale

 

[unidentified code]

New apartment isn't working out so well. Who could have ever seen this coming.

 

[Ruin]

How can you not pay rent among 3-4 people? That's like $300 a person.

 

[Lime Rogue]

New apartment isn't working out so well. Who could have ever seen this coming.
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Kayla, you dumb fuck, the anon is not implying you HAVEN'T looked at online resources. You'd know if you had even a smidge of reading comprehension

Her "I'm one of the good ones!!" sperging when she isn't even diagnosed is so fucking funny. The lack of self awareness makes it 10 times better. I love this cow.

 

[shartnado]

every time i wonder ", has she learned and stopped posting stupid shit online, the thread's been quiet," she comes back with something new and guaranteed to be completely fucking stupid. i'm so glad.

honestly, i'm just waiting for some other exceptional tumblr user to call her ableist for telling people with npd how to be more like her, when she hasn't even been diagnosed and just decided that she is the Only Good NPD Person on the site.

 

[cluelessly]

Kayla wonders why she can't write longform when she struggles to understand a two-sentence anon lol.

 

[unidentified code]

How can you not pay rent among 3-4 people? That's like $300 a person.

Because only two of them have jobs. It's just Nick and Kayla splitting the bills while the third person freeloads.

 

[Scribbler]

Because only two of them have jobs. It's just Nick and Kayla splitting the bills while the third person freeloads.

Just Nick for now. Kayla got fired.

 

[unidentified code]

 

[retard strength]

"...but it really felt like I'd be ready for this"

 

[moorhen]

"...but it really felt like I'd be ready for this"

How does she feel like she’d be ready for this when she literally e-begged for money to move in the first place?

 

[unidentified code]

She's still hate reading Noth's blog and talking about her, so why is it bad if Noth does the same? Update: Took a glance at Noth's blog. She's not even talking about Kayla, and yet Kayla is acting like it's about her.

 

[beautiful person]

How does she feel like she’d be ready for this when she literally e-begged for money to move in the first place?

And she kept buying stupid shit with her surplus funds instead of having the adult wherewithal to put it aside as a buffer for a situation like this. She didn't have a plan for any of this aside from 'find and secure apartment' and 'aquire job near said apartment.' Which sounds decent enough, except that the job she got was notoriously high-turnover (which she poo-pooed at when people pointed this out to her) and she didn't already have that buffer for the inevitable emergency.

She sure as hell wasn't ready in terms of emotional maturity and personal responsibility.