Tiberius Rising Tiberius: Origins excerpt -

[DeagleDad420]

So Jace posted this on Twitter:
http://pastebin.com/L4aytXsA

I encourage you to read it yourself before reading this thread because it's incredibly short and it's incredibly insane to the point where you probably wouldn't believe me if I described it to you.

Highlights:

Spoiler

"They don’t call me da car-boy for nothing around this town.”"

He expertly handled the wheel as the car flew between passing cars like a magestic eagle.

Even a Latino Street Racer such as him had never put pedal to the medal that fast before and the dynamic duo was truly in a rusty situation if there ever was one ok he said.

"With an expertly-timed drift manuever, the Red truck did a 180-move then began going backwards at full speed."

The Red Truck was street racing right towards what would soon be known as the Ground Zero Mosque.

 

[KingofManga420]

I fucking died holy shit

 

[Da Pickle Monsta]

So, Jack goes to the red light and . . . DUN DUN DUN . . . there's a Muslim.

This is the only thing I could think of:

[youtube]HIPljGWGNt4[/youtube]

I wonder if Jace checks under the bed for Muslims.

 

[Andrew Noel Schaefer]

Admitably, there is some semblance of improvement here when you get to the street race scene. Giving props to where they belong.

Its still racist, and the begining part sounds like its setting up some XXX GAY INTERRACIAL HARDCORE BACKSEAT ACTION XXX when its describing the car and JackxRameriez's elation over it.

 

[Batman VS Tony Danza]

"“Infidel!” he heard the man scream over his Nickelback CD."

Guys, we can stop making sentences now because nothing can beat this one.

 

[OfflineCyberBully]

"'You sure you know what you're doing, holmes?'" Watson should know better than to question Sherlock.

I love how the car moves like an eagle. And the cameo by the Ground Zero Mosque? We're about to witness the rebirth of the Great American Novel, Ladies and Gents. Epic.

 

[exball]

Jack reclined in the ergonomic chair and grasped the stick shift with his hand. “Dude…” he trailed off, lost in heaven. Ramirez sat next to him. “Sick, right?

Just wat.

 

[OfflineCyberBully]

Jack reclined in the ergonomic chair and grasped the stick shift with his hand. “Dude…” he trailed off, lost in heaven. Ramirez sat next to him. “Sick, right?

Just wat.

They're sharing a moment.

 

[Varis]

Compared to the last chapter of Rising I read, which was the one where Jenkins died...

The writing is not bad.

 

[Tavern Explorer]

The Red Truck was street racing right towards what would soon be known as the Ground Zero Mosque.

THEY'RE GONNA STAHP (they're gonna stahp) THUH MAWSK AT GROUND ZEE-ROE

 

[StallChaser]

The only way it could have been any better is if Soap made a cameo appearance.

 

[Batman VS Tony Danza]

Compared to the last chapter of Rising I read, which was the one where Jenkins died...

The writing is not bad.

He has an editor now. I think it's Tavern Explorer.

 

[Gothicserpent]

This is a gift.

A gift to us all.

 

[Organic Fapcup]

Oh I have to do a reading of this.

 

[WWWWolf]

“Hey, you’re gonna get me fuckin’ arrested!”

Ramirez knows the law.

Spoiler

“Let’s catch him and interrogate him for Intel.”

This is supposed to be happening years ago, right? Everyone knows that AMD was wayyyy better back then.

 

[KingofManga420]

This is starting to go into post modern masterpiece levels. I just want more, if Jace can come up with this shit while on his meds, he needs to start chugging those adderall... Wait no, we all know what happens when he does that.

 

[TheMorawOne]

How the fuck can you say "race" in broken English? It's one word. Also, this is great, I wish we could ever see a movie scene based off this.

 

[KingofManga420]

How the fuck can you say "race" in broken English? It's one word. Also, this is great, I wish we could ever see a movie scene based off this.

I had that discussion with my friend, it was hilarious. Also I love how the Muslim is dressed in traditional Arab garb while he's smoking a pipe and wearing sunglasses in a red pick up truck.

 

[BillRiley]

So this is what goes on in Jace's head. Huh.

 

[Tavern Explorer]

He has an editor now. I think it's Tavern Explorer.

I've only helped with Chapter 18 and a bit of 19 so far, he didn't tell me he'd already started writing up some of Origins.